Would anyone critique my poem..?

I enjoyed your poem and am no expert, but I will give my opinion. I prefer rhyming poems, but as for this free verse one , I believe it was well written. Though if you practiced a bit more with syntax, I think you would make a great short story writer. Your poem was lengthy, but as for me I prefer it. I would like to see you post more poems :) If you are trying for publicity though, you may want to write more on topics that relate better to people, this poem (again I AM NOT AN EXPERT) seems to only relate to a selected group of readers. But I did enjoy this poem, and I give you my best wishes on your poetry, defiantly do not stop writing!! ~Violet